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You.
Yes, You.
Staring at your screen, at this text.
Reading it in your mind’s voice.
You hear it don’t you?
Who’s voice is it that you hear?
Is it your own?
Whether it is or isn’t, you recognize it.
It’s been there for as long as you remember.
Judging, advising, helping, hurting.
Reminding you of happy times,
of embarrassing times.
Making you smile, cry and cringe.
Your own personal critic,
hiding behind your eyes.
Seeing everything,
hearing everything that you do.
It grows with you.
You probably talk back to it,
it doesn’t make you crazy.
Holding discourse with it,
solving problems with it.
It doesn’t always say what you want it to,
many times it disgusts you.
But that voice,
that’s you.
That’s the you that only you get to know.
The you that you hide from the world.
That you is truth.
That you is terrible.
That you is creative.
That you is cruel.
That you is complex.
That you is beautiful.
Yes, you.
You.
Enjoy, tell me your thoughts please.
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Summer-Chrysantheml Featured By Owner 4 days ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I really liked this piece! Even though I've lived with my inner voice for so long, I never knew how I'm supposed to talk about it, so I'm impressed that you summed it up so well! It's funny, disagreeing with your inner voice would seem somewhat strange if you don't stop to think about it? Because disagreeing with yourself sounds like a contradiction no matter how you put it. Yet, your inner voice is nevertheless part of you. Anyway, nice work. :)
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 4 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
I'm very glad you liked it :)
What fascinates me the most is the variety of styles that the inner voice comes in with each person.
I've talked to many people about it, 
I never receive the same answers about it.
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DarkStar016 Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
It's scary that I thought "No, the voice reading this is the other one..."
To quote you "it doesn’t make you crazy." I'll take your word for it xD
Good poem
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
I've felt crazy so many times until I was able to make peace with my inner voice. I'd be mentally screaming and arguing with myself during seemingly normal and average moments, even surrounded by people and maintaining a normal look( Or so I thought, it's more of a stare off into the distance and hear nothing look )....I've been called an unresponsive dick due to one of those moments, only because I had no way of explaining to them the torment going on inside my head.

I'm glad you enjoyed the work, thank you :D
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DarkStar016 Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
I've had my share of far off looks too. I found my inner voice, well, one of them, comforting. Perhaps its just different shades of me, like how people have imaginary friends to comfort them. And maybe even, its more normal than people think. Damn media and doctors always trying to fill us with drugs and make us out to be crazy, but it would be weirder to not have that inner voice...wait, isn't that what a sociopath is? No damn inner voice haha I'm rambling now. Thanks for the watch, i'll keep my eye on you too!~
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know if I have more than one, but I do know that the inner dialogue has different moods. Most times it can be rather dark. I'd say its very normal though, if someone were to tell me that didn't have any inner voice I'd think they were a very dull person and most likely in need of real help. What a lonely existence to always be alone with not even yourself to talk to. I need to stop or I run the risk of rambling myself haha
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DarkStar016 Featured By Owner 3 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Haha it's fine to ramble, I know i'm like that. It's always nice to find you aren't alone and crazy...or maybe we're just crazy together ahaha that's a possibility.
I'll try to read some more of your work. I'm always busy so it takes me some time x.x
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 2 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Crazy is what the world calls people who aren't a part of the status quo :p and I'm more than happy to not be a part of that.
And awesome :D I hope you enjoy what you read!
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DarkStar016 Featured By Owner 23 hours ago  Hobbyist Writer
Yes! I'm glad not to be considered as such either.
And thank you~
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GUILLE832 Featured By Owner 5 days ago
You know, ever since I first watched Freeman's Mind I've developed an inner monologue that only shuts up whenever I'm concentrating on something else, so I'm pretty familiarized with my inner "you".
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
I'll have to check that one out I hadn't hear of it until now.An inner monologue huh? How does that usually go? Sounds pretty interesting :)
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GUILLE832 Featured By Owner 5 days ago
Well, I simply comment on anything as if I were talking to someone else. I never talk to myself in the second person, though; always first person.
Something that's kind of weird too is that despite English not being my native language, that's the tongue I primarily use during my inner monologue, although I tend to alter it with Spanish.
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, that's always better than third person haha
That's actually really cool that you can use two different languages in your mind. Makes me want to learn another language just to see if I can do that or not :D
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GUILLE832 Featured By Owner 5 days ago
Yeah, it's pretty easy. I sometimes mix them when I can't find a proper term for one of them and believe it or not, I tend to recur to English in order to use terms that are non existent in Spanish.
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
So awesome :)
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AshiharaLover Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist General Artist
That 'you' is NOT you, but a part of you, true. But that is also the MIND. The mind always noisy, the voice the schizophrenic people speak out loud. The voice is the 'thinker', underneath is the Being.
Read "Into the now".
But my voice in my head is also judging your text right now, no? ;)
The mind is a thief..
But still well written:-)
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brassteeth Featured By Owner 2 days ago
Hi, who wrote "into the now"? 
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AshiharaLover Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist General Artist
Eckhart Tolle
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brassteeth Featured By Owner 1 day ago
oh you mean The Power of Now..Ok yes thanks.
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AshiharaLover Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist General Artist
omg, yes aha fail I always write it wrong
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brassteeth Featured By Owner 18 hours ago
all good. I thought there was something I hadn't read...Thanks for getting back to me
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Oh but that "You" is plenty you, always there, always weighing in on what you do. It's more responsible for who you are than those who raised us. It's the outside objector we keep inside us at all times. The mind is who we are, the rest of us just keeps it alive.
The voice in my head appreciated your insight! Meow :3 
Thank you also, I'm growing pretty proud of it.:happybounce: 
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GraceJediHeart Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Hobbyist General Artist
That's pretty good. 

The inner voice is a weird thing. Sometimes it's with you, sometimes it's against you, and sometimes it even argues with itself. It's like this...

"Hey look, fresh apple fritters. I should buy some."
"No shouldn't do that, I just had pop tarts for breakfast. Besides I'm trying to eat healthier and save money."
"But they rarely sell apple fritters here, and that's a good deal."
"It's four bucks a dozen. I can get a salad for that price."
"I don't want a salad." 
"For four dollars I can get eight cans of dog food for Jitterbug."
"Jitterbug has twelve cans at home. Besides, I want those fritters."
"No I don't, I'm trying to eat healthier."
"Alright, if I promise to go jogging later I could get them now."
"Nope, I never keep that promise. Just walk away from the bakery now Grace." 
"But I haven't had fritters for almost a year." 
"But they're bad for me."
"I don't care, I like apple fritters, and hey, there's fruit in them. Yolo!"
....
"I'm such a pig. I could have saved that four dollars for a Mother's Day present."
"Hey, Mom likes apple fritters too. I should totally bring her some."
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Hahaha

That's pretty perfect, although I can't say I've ever had that particular inner dialogue about apple fritters I've had one that is somewhat similar but with energy drinks:

"Man I could really go for a monster."
"Yeah but do you really need it, you're already pretty alert."
"True...but I could be more alert and get things done even faster."
"But what about the crash?"
"I'll just drink it in sips that way I prolong the crash and maximize my buzz time."
"But you never do that, you chug it."
"....no I don't."
"I do."
"Well what about a half of a 5-hour energy?"
"That's cool, but I should probably wait until I have food in me."
"I'll eat later, i'll be fine."
"You lose your appetite when you drink those."
"Sometimes, but I'll eat anyways."
"I'll just get a Monster."
[Chugs Monster]
"I knew that would happen!"
"I'll be fine."
[Heart rate increase]
"I might die."
"I need to sit down for a while."
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GraceJediHeart Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Hobbyist General Artist
Uh oh. 
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I stick to coffee mostly now haha
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GraceJediHeart Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol. I'm a diet cola person myself. I tried a powerful energy drink once (it wasn't a monster, all I know is it contained guarana) during the summer right after I graduated high school. I read all of Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows in one night. As fun as that was I don't ever want to do it again.
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Afflicted-Writer Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Damn, whatever that was sounds like one hell of a drink. Also, something I should probably stay away from haha
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